Movie Night by Jazelyn
Copyright 2014
A/N: You know when teachers say, "Show, don't tell"? My English teacher this year brought this to the light and I think it improved my writing a lot. Basically, you get an idea that is okay, but then show it through actions and what it looks like. Instead of saying, "Many people were dead", you would say "Countless corpses lined the blood-stained street", because it makes it more interesting. So here's my showing paragraph for "The movie was frightening." Movie Night by JazelynYears ago when I had to tippy-toe to reach the kitchen sink, my brother drove me around our small town. One day he seated me on his torn up leather seat in his emerald green car before driving me to the parking lot of what used to be a grocery store. Cars of every color and kind were parked at the side of the building. After staring at the blank wall, a black and white film flickered in front of my eyes. An orchestral piece swelled out of my brother’s dented radio as the title appeared ahead of us. I struggled to hear through the fuzziness of the dialogue, yet I still leaned forward in my seat. I jumped and gasped each time a monster popped on the screen and lunged toward shrieking victims. I turned away at some parts, focusing my attention into the cars of young couples; the girl would always lean into the boy’s embrace. Once the movie faded out, my brother chuckled at my trembling fingers. I fell asleep that night with my mind full of creatures and demons that howl like the night wind.
Copyright 2014
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